"Intervention" Spaiku, Part 4: Pretension (4/16)

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

I.
Juxtaposition—
Buffy gropes to find the truth;
Spike fondles a lie.


II.
Spars with the Slayer’s
robotic doppelganger,
works out his issues.


III.
Gadget likes to play;
what she lacks, she makes up in
enthusiasm.


IV.
Bot’s ecstatic chirps
helpless against you, you fiend!
music to his ears.


*V.
I want to let you
(gasp) bite me and devour me
until there’s no more!


VI.
Wants to be trusted
with her life’s blood, to be found
irresistible.


VII.
Jarred from fantasy—
[Beeeep. Start this program over?]
never be Buffy.


*Found haiku taken from episode.


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Comments

[zanthinegirl.livejournal.com]

::loves your spaiku::

Juxtaposition—
Buffy gropes to find the truth;
Spike fondles a lie.

How do you actually convey so much meaning in 17 syllables?

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Aww, thank you! I'm so glad that you're enjoying these.

*lol* You don't wanna know! These things used to just pop into my brain without much effort (and sometimes still do if it's just one little moment), but now that I'm tackling whole episodes, it's gotten a lot more, uh, detail-oriented. I seem do a lot of the same kind of script and characater analysis stuff that I would do if I were going to direct something. So, prolly more than you wanted to know, but there it is! Between the haiku and the doll!fic, theatre geek me is a happy camper. :)

[next_to_normal]

LOVE that first one. Such a good parallel.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! That was one of the first ones I came up with, and then I was like, "Well, damn. That's the whole episode. What do I do now?"

[rebcake.livejournal.com]

Oh my! Groping, fondling, sparring, playing, biting, devouring, wanting: just wait around, fella.

This is an incredible sequence, from the insightful first, to the reality blast last.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Hahaha! I love your perspective on these. I had no idea that this section was so action-packed! I'm thrilled that you enjoyed them.

And yeah, stick around for Season Six, Mr. Man! It's gonna make playing patty-cake with the Bot look like an episode of Teletubbies.

[molly_may]

Juxtaposition—
Buffy gropes to find the truth;
Spike fondles a lie.

Wow, way to condense the theme of the episode into one tiny haiku! Love this.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! I was trying to find something thematic that would tie Spike and Buffy together since they have so little actual screen time together in the episode, and that was the haiku that helped me figure out what the hell I was doing.

[xc-runner50.livejournal.com]

These speak so strongly, with so little.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I don't think I could write a narrative if I tried, but I've had a lot of fun trying to see how much stuff I can fit into a little box.

[missus-grace.livejournal.com]

Spike fondles a lie
Yes. Ouch.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Poor lonely bastard!

[petzipellepingo.livejournal.com]

Juxtaposition—
Buffy gropes to find the truth;
Spike fondles a lie.


Oh yes, they're both at a crossroads

I want to let you
(gasp) bite me and devour me
until there’s no more!


VI.
Wants to be trusted
with her life’s blood, to be found
irresistible.


VII.
Jarred from fantasy—
[Beeeep. Start this program over?]
never be Buffy.

Poor sad deluded Spike...

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Yeah, the, er, relationship with the Buffybot really marks a low-as-you-can-go romantic moment for the Big Bad, doesn't it? (Well, until Season Six, anyway!)

[brunettepet.livejournal.com]

Tis is a great line: Spike fondles a lie.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Hee! Thank you. I waffled between that and Spike feels up a lie but ultimately decided that "fondle" sounded more . . . intimate.

[penny-lane-42.livejournal.com]

Juxtaposition—
Buffy gropes to find the truth;
Spike fondles a lie.

Absolutely brilliant.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Thank you so much! This is the haiku that helped me figure out what the hell I really thought was happening in the episode, and I'm glad to hear that it spoke to you.

[gillo]

Juxtaposition—
Buffy gropes to find the truth;
Spike fondles a lie.

So true. And sad.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

*nods* It's a huge relief to me that they both get a little moment of truth at the end of the episode, because it's pretty bleak, existentially speaking, up to that point.

Thanks for commenting, dear!

[gillo]

it's pretty bleak, existentially speaking, up to that point.

It is indeed - both of them feeling that there is nothing for them in the "real" world, seeking an answer. The comedy doesn't quite conceal it.

[brutti-ma-buoni.livejournal.com]

This found haiku is perfect - as is VII; while I is genuinely thought-provoking.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Thank you! The first one is probably my favorite of them all because it helped me figure out what thread of the episode I wanted to follow. I'm thrilled to hear that these worked for you.

[powerofthebook.livejournal.com]

Juxtaposition—
Buffy gropes to find the truth;
Spike fondles a lie.

I know most folks have mentioned it before, but you hit the jugular here with cool precision. Awesome!

(VII is snerk-worthy!)

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I'm not sure that I really knew where I wanted to go with this episode until I wrote that one, and it was a relief to figure out some kind of connection (even it's just a contrast!) between Spike and Buffy. And, at least they both get a little moment of truth in the end.

[moscow-watcher.livejournal.com]

Gadget likes to play;

Damn, that sounds soooo surrealistically hilarious. Your wordplay never ceases to amaze me.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

*lol* I'll admit that I giggled when I tried to imagine Spike actually saying that line. How far the Big Bad has fallen in this ep!

Thanks so much, hon. I'm so glad that you're enjoying these.

[green-maia.livejournal.com]

Juxtaposition—
Buffy gropes to find the truth;
Spike fondles a lie.

Ouch.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

I don't think I realized until I started writing these how out of the loop both Spike and Buffy are in this episode. I was blinded by the funny! I'm glad that both of them at least have a little moment of connection and truth at the end.

[riccadonna.livejournal.com]

Well, the first one is perfect just as everybody else said, and the third one is pretty evocative (you can really hear him speaking); all of these are funny and sad.

[mere-ubu.livejournal.com]

Thank you! I think that I was expecting to find more humor in this scene but then realized just how pathetic a relationship it is between Spike and the Bot. *shakes head sadly* That's one lonely little vampire.