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TITLE:  “Kiss”

MEDIUM: Fiction, approximately 200 words

RATING: PG-13

SUMMARY: This is a short excerpt from my 300,000 word novel, Imitation of a Man. The first chapter of IoaM was posted during the Spring, 2009 round of seasonal_spuffy. The remainder of the novel will be posted as a complete work, not a WIP, at my LJ in late December or early January. Many thanks to enigmatic blues for letting me make this excerpt available here. 

         

                                                                                                                   " KISS "


          It never failed to surprise: the downiness just below his earlobe where the slight rasp of shaved beard turned into hairs so fine they were all but invisible. She squeezed her eyes shut and inhaled the soap secent of his skin and let the small hairs tickle her; then skimmed her lips over the transition, tingling down to her toes with the contrast between softness and ever so faint scratchiness as she moved form his ear to the edge of his jaw, then across his cheek in a line of murmuring, nibbling kisses.

          When her lips reached his, she breathed in mint and salt and the humid air that filled his lungs. The kiss, shy at first, became more forceful. Her tongue entered him, touched the yielding underside of his tongue, darted into the slick pocket betweeen his gums and lip, probed his human teeth, amazed to feel a small, previously unnoticed chip in one molar.While her tongue relearned the contours of his mouth, her right hand trailed upward along his arm, letting the curve of his shoulder and neck guide her till her fingers found and cupped the line of his jaw, stroked the scar in the sleek little mouse of his eyebrow, traced the shell of his ear. Delight..... Contentment..... Peace..... She took her time and so did he, unhurried, hushed the two of them set free in another world.
 

Comments

[xc-runner50.livejournal.com]

Marvelous excerpt. I look forward to the release of the story when it is ready. Hey maybe it could be a Christmas present or New Year present to us lovers of Spuffy.

That kiss was smoking hot and meaningful at the same time.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

I'd love to start posting by Christmas, but I'll have to work like Santa's elves to do it. Thanks for the encouragement!

[abelina.livejournal.com]

So visual! I loved it.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[framefolly.livejournal.com]

*fans self*

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Glad you liked it!

[amyxaphania.livejournal.com]

Excellent excerpt. I remember reading the first chapter of your fic in the last round, definitely looking forward to reading the rest.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Look for the whole thing three months from now. Thanks for reading!

[writero.livejournal.com]

Oh lovely! I'm really looking forward to reading the finished piece. :D

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Thanks for commenting!

[manoah.livejournal.com]

There you are!

I remember reading the first bit last time around and just loving it and your writing style. I'm very excited to hear that you'll be posting a completed work!

This is lovely and hot at the same time. Excellent way to begin our Seasonal Spuffy!

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

"...lovely and hot at the same time.

Thank you! That's what I hope to achieve. Very pleased that you like it!

[moscow-watcher.livejournal.com]

Sounds very intriguing. Looking forward to the completed novel.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

I hope it lives up to expectations. Thanks for reading!

[louise39.livejournal.com]

...another world. Enthralling bit.
I remember from the first chapter, Sex created a bond between them...

Awaiting the finished work.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Thanks for your patience, and for reading!

[ayinhara.livejournal.com]

I look forward to reading the completed work.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Hope it's worth the wait! Thank you!

[penny-lane-42.livejournal.com]

Oh, wow! That was lovely! I tend to start to skimming when writers describe the physical stuff in too much detail, but your writing is so compelling that I could have just kept reading forever.

And, like others upthread, I remember reading your excerpt from the last round and absolutely loving it, so I can't wait till you start posting the full story!

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Thank you for the very generous praise!

I also can't wait till the whole story is posted. I think I must feel a bit like someone's who's nine months pregnant and badly overdue probably feels. Been working on this for five years, and I'm ready to be done!

Anyway, thank you, and I hope three months from now you're reading and enjoying the whole thing. : )

[seapealsh.livejournal.com]

So descriptive. You could feel the love.

I can't believe it's almost time to read the "whole thing". Looking forward to it.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Thanks for being patient! And for commenting!

[kitten2you.livejournal.com]

*sigh* I cant wait to read more!

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Thanks for commenting!

[jamalov29.livejournal.com]

Oh lovely !

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Thank you!

[missmurchison.livejournal.com]

Very evocative, and descriptive of one of the things I love about kissing a guy, that scratchiness that fades into softness along his cheek.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Thank you! Your comment has--for reasons I'll explain--absolutely made my day!

The reason I'm so thrilled is that the last time I kissed a male was over forty years ago. So, when I wrote the description of this kiss, I didn't write from personal experience, or even any clear memory of what it would be like to kiss a male. Instead, I wrote from pure imagination, closing my eyes and trying to answer questions: what do I feel against my lips? what do I smell? what do I hear? how do these sensations affect my emotions?

Of course, imagining things outside one's personal experience is basic to writing fiction and is hardly something unusual. Still, it's very satisfying to hear that the end result rings true. : )

[missmurchison.livejournal.com]

I'm even more impressed now. Because, take it from someone who kissed a guy five minutes ago, you got it exactly.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

LOL. Thanks!

[riccadonna.livejournal.com]

Very curious to read the whole thing when it's done!
Thanks for the excerpt.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

You're welcome! Thank you for reading!

P.S. If you want to check out the first chapter, it was posted to last spring's seasonal_spuffy. I believe an index to all the stories was posted at the end of that season.

[riccadonna.livejournal.com]

I was puzzled because I remembered that you posted the first chapter but didn't actually remember the chapter, so I went back and realized that I was sidetracked by the compelling Donner, Party Of Four (Wow!), and decided that I really wanted to read the entire story when it was out...I may change my mind, though.

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

I'll be reposting the first chapter at my LJ when I post the whole novel, and it will probably undergo some more revision before then because I tend to tweak things every time I look at them. So, yes, waiting for the whole thing isn't a bad idea.

Glad you liked Donner!

[ladyofthelog.livejournal.com]

Beautiful description. I can't wait to read the whole fic!

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

The rest of Ioam should show up on my LJ in December or early January. Thanks for commenting!

[rahirah]

Tres yummy! :D

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Like word candy? :)

Thanks!

[zanthinegirl.livejournal.com]

That was lovely! Very vivid writing; I'm looking forward to sitting down with the whole thing. Thanks for sharing this preview!

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Glad you liked it! The remaining 299,800 words or so should show up at my LJ in late December/early January.

Thanks!

[jen-nsync-landl.livejournal.com]

Wonderfully visceral. And love the thought of the kiss setting the two of them "free in another world." Lovely!

[darkapple.livejournal.com]

Glad you liked, and thanks for letting me know!