Drabble, The Second

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

And here's the second offering...

Drabble: Twenty Times
Author: annapurna_2
Rating: G
Disclaimer: Kinda angsty
Feedback: You betcha!



Twenty times a day, she tells him she loves him. Tries to make up for all the days she wouldn’t say it. Couldn’t say it. Didn’t know.

Twenty times a day, he smiles and strokes her hair. Kisses her lips. Pulls her close.

Twenty times a day, she waits for him to say it back. Revels in it. Lives to hear it.

Twenty times a day, she wishes he believed her. Tries to prove it. Make him see.

Twenty times a day, she dies inside. Holds him tighter. Loves him harder.

Terrified some scars can’t heal.

Twenty times a day.

 

Comments

[just-sue.livejournal.com]

Ouch. That is a bit angsty. But very credible. Thank you.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Ouch. That is a bit angsty.

See? I warned you. But would you listen to me? Noooo.

Heh.

But very credible. Thank you.

My thanks to you, too!

[priscellie.livejournal.com]

Wah! "Kinda angsty" is right! Horrible and bitter in all the best ways.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Wah!

My work here is done. ;-)

Horrible and bitter in all the best ways.

That's a lovely compliment. Thank you! :-)

[kathyh]

I've really enjoyed all three of your drabbles but I think this one's my favourite. Both bitter and sweet, like dark chocolate.

[ayinhara.livejournal.com]

Both bitter and sweet, like dark chocolate.

That hits it right on the mark.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

And thank you, too! :-)

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Oooh, thank you! I love your description! :-)

[slaymesoftly.livejournal.com]

Sets the tone perfectly.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Tone and flow are near and dear to my heart, so I really appreciate that. Thank you.

[kargrif.livejournal.com]

Wow, very angsty! Great job!

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

I'm so pleased you like! :-)

[herself_nyc]

Oh wow. Very believable.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Thank you. That's very much appreciated. :-)

[paratti.livejournal.com]

Ooh, likes muchly.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Hee! ::bouncing::

Thanks!

[cindergal.livejournal.com]

Aww, so sad.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Aww, so sad.

Why, I believe you're right. ;-)

Thanks for reading!

[sharelle.livejournal.com]

That was wonderful, and so sad. Something about regret and numbers with those two -- it works as a nice parallel to Spike's 147 days.

Great job!

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

That was wonderful, and so sad.

Thank you. :-)

Something about regret and numbers with those two -- it works as a nice parallel to Spike's 147 days.

Oooh, you know I hadn't thought of--

Um, I mean...thanks! So glad you caught that. I worked very hard to get that subtle parallel in there. ::nods vigorously::

Heh. Don't you just love a happy accident?

Great job!

Thank you again!

[itmustbetuesday.livejournal.com]

Eep! So bittersweet... I love bittersweet, and I especially adored the first line. Thank you so much for sharing.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Eep! So bittersweet... I love bittersweet, and I especially adored the first line.

Oooh, I'm so pleased. Thank you! :-)

[moscow-watcher.livejournal.com]

Beautiful. Hopeful. Sweet.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Thank you for the lovely words. :-)

[jen-nsync-landl.livejournal.com]

*sigh* This one smarts a bit. Well done.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

*sigh* This one smarts a bit.

I know. Sorry about that. ;-)


Well done.

Thank you!

I love this.

[ladyemorgaine.livejournal.com]

The rhythm is like a heart beat... a mantra...

I like the mystery embedded in it as well. Thanks for this offering.

Re: I love this.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

The rhythm is like a heart beat... a mantra...

Yes! Thank you. :-)

I like the mystery embedded in it as well. Thanks for this offering.

I'm so pleased you enjoyed it. Thanks again!

[jerusha]

I liked the rhythm to this one. Very lyrical.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Very lyrical.

You couldn't have said anything nicer. Thank you!

[lmbossy.livejournal.com]

*ooh* I like ... it's got a fab rhythm to it

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

Thank you! ::bounces happily::

[amybnnyc.livejournal.com]

So, so sad, and yet so believable.

Beautiful, beautiful pain.

[annapurna-2.livejournal.com]

I'm so pleased you liked it, and thank you for the lovely words.

Also, please forgive the delay in responding. Tis the season for not enough hours in the day. ;-)

Btw, I've barely made a dent in all the reading at seasonal_spuffy so far, but I've heard wonderful things about "Whispers in a Dead Man's Ear." Do you by any chance remember what date you posted? I'd like very much to add it to my must-read bookmarks.

[amybnnyc.livejournal.com]

please forgive the delay in responding. Tis the season for not enough hours in the day. ;-)
Hee! A big ditto on that one... I just got back to a computer after a few days away, so please don't worry about a delay at all! Hope the season was happy! :)

I'm so glad that you're hearing good things about "Whispers"! I posted on December 2, with the final part of it posted in my journal on December 4 (there's a link to it in the seasonal_spuffy posts). I hope you enjoy when you get a chance to read, and thanks so much!