Poetry: Dance of Madness

[suewritero]

Author SueWriteRo (DW)/WriteRo (LJ)
Title Dance of Madness
Rating and warnings G, but angsty 
Word count 143
Medium Poetry
Setting early S7

 

Whirling figures dance

Through his mind

This one and that one

Spinning like tops

Never fixed

Constantly moving

Accusing, reproving

Victims

He remembers now

Gory, bloody endings

Playing with food

Mother would be so

Disappointed

Whirl, whirl, whirl...

Through his mind,

Confused, haunted

Nightmare visions

Populated by victims

Punctuated by death

Death

Death

Always death

Dark and bitter

Ashes in his mouth

Dryer than the cigarettes he

Smokes inhales deep into

Lungs no longer functioning

Whirling figures again

A kalidescope of images

Ever changing, never staying

Same... sane... never... ever...

And then

A light

A glow

A shimmer of gold

She dances into view

Memory and dream

Beauty and killer

Slayer

Bold, brash

Dancing, whirling

Focus...

Focus...

Focus...

Glimpse of sanity

Then gone as she

Whirls away

In a flurry of blows and

Recriminations

Dancing another dance

To a tune

He cannot hear.

Comments

[zanthinegirl]

Ooh! I like that a lot; very visceral season 7 Spike!

[suewritero]

Thanks!

[waddiwasiwitch]

That was amazing. Well done. You captured his insanity and guilt perfectly

[suewritero]

I'm glad you liked it. :)

[rebcake]

Mother would be so

Disappointed

Oh, I loved this line, as it made me think, "Which mother?" Either way, one will be disappointed.

I love that she is his light in the darkness, a blazing torch off in the confused distance. Nice image.

Well done, m'dear! Thanks for these!

[suewritero]

You're welcome! Thank you for the feedback. :D

[gryfndor_godess]

This is so beautiful! I particularly love these lines:

Playing with food
Mother would be so
Disappointed

Populated by victims
Punctuated by death

Glimpse of sanity
Then gone as she
Whirls away
In a flurry of blows and
Recriminations
Dancing another dance
To a tune
He cannot hear.

I'm normally ambivalent about poetry, but this is incredibly moving and vivid.

[suewritero]

I'm glad it touched you. :) Thank you for the feedback!

[sarian71]

I like both of the poems very much! I've read them through several times now, and each time I found something new to appreciate about them.

[suewritero]

I'm glad you like them. Thanks for the feedback! :D

[lutamira]

Ooo, this is really great! Spike is a poet, but we don't get very many poetry fanworks at all for some reason. And this so clearly evokes S7 Spuffy - well done you!

[suewritero]

Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. That's what I was going for... :D

[spikeslou]

The bewildering confusion with its brief moment of clarity... poor Spike.