ext_7185 ([identity profile] bogwitch.livejournal.com) wrote in [community profile] seasonal_spuffy 2006-03-07 11:03 pm (UTC)

Hee. This has been a matter of great discussion with one of my betas. She'll love that you mentioned it!

Without being able to shift into his POV, it was difficult to get his feelings across, and I attempt that in the next chapter too. The moment he knows for sure it's her is when she says, “Do we really need weapons for this?”. Before that he recognises something, 'He’s searching her face for something, frowning when he doesn’t find what he seeks', but he's not sure what it is. He's not expecting her to be the person he finds. It's also a bit dark and she delibarately distracts him away from looking at her too closely.

Hope that helps.

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